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pippa121 (User)
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| Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found at: 2008/05/01 19:21 |
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I liked the ending, but wondered why this one daughter had this one episode of knowing the future. Also, why the Grandpa believed her so strongly when he didn't give her the time of day normally.
The idea is good, but needs to be elaborated on more and changed around.
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dmdifalco (User)
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| Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found at: 2008/05/09 22:33 |
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Simply beautiful! This story reminds me of the bible verse
"and a child shall lead them!" Thank you for sharing!
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| Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found a 2008/05/11 20:06 |
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I agree with the previous posters that this story could be fleshed out a bit more to make it more believable. Also, I'm not sure it's necessary to mention the dementia at the end...
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| Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found a 2008/05/16 19:59 |
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I thought it was very well written. I could see myself on the farm experiencing her descriptions. I do agree with the others, there is something "missing" when exploring the decision made, which needs to be re-evaluated. I wouldn't propose to have the answer, but when it's re-worked it will be an outstanding story, I'm sure!
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| Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found at: 2008/05/17 06:59 |
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I enjoyed reading this. I thought that it was sad that the young girl who had such strong convictions is now suffering from dementia.
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