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Stacy(User)
Posts: 16
Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found at: 2008/04/08 06:12
I thought this story was a little hard to follow because it jumped around really fast from one topic to the other. I think the part about the mom could have been left out because the story about her twin seemed to be the main focus and we would get the point without that about her mom. It's a nice story but I think it needs a little work still.
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#89
Lisa Skier(User)
Posts: 2
Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found a 2008/04/29 15:51
Wasn't my favorite but definitely tells a story that we can all comprehend. A bit of organization would be useful.
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#101
mariposaricart(User)
Posts: 13
Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found a 2008/04/30 10:37
I have to disagree with the comment to leave out the part about their mom. I think it very much has a place in this story. I think part of the story is very much about the personal growth and message of the twin. On the other hand, there is very much a theme that love lasts beyond death. I think the "messages" from both the mom and the twin illustrate this.
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#155
cewaye(User)
Posts: 19
Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found a 2008/05/11 20:02
This wasn't my favorite story. It was disjointed and choppy, and in the end I didn't feel that it had a clear thin thread message. I think it's nice that the author feels a connection to her sister now that she's gone, but I'm not sure there's a message there that translates to something that a general audience can relate to.
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#176
saschab(User)
Posts: 19
Re:Comments are welcome! This story can be found a 2008/05/16 18:38
I enjoyed this story. I understood the mom setting up the twin relationship and although I think it needs a bit more polish, I think the author has an intereting experience to share.
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